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第4章 分“照猫画虎”——控制性写作(4)

The next day, the owner of the wallet went to Li Ping’s school.He thanked the headmaster and wanted to give a reward to Li Ping, but Li Ping refused to accept it.The owner then thanked Li Ping for what he had done.

Presentation/oral build——up 介绍/口头组织

1.Read the model passage and retell it.

阅读理解记忆范文,然后复述。

2.Leading questions on the passage.就范文提问

e.g.-What was Li Ping doing one afternoon?

-What did he see?

-Where was the wallet?

-What did he find inside it?

-What did he do?

3.Analyze the passage: 分析范文

(1)Pay attention to the tense used in each paragraph.注意每段的时态

(2)Point out how the paragraphs are linked systematically by relating the content in each ─——to show cohesion and organization of the passage.了解各段内容组织的系统联系

(3)Parallel topic习作对应题目

An Honest Shop——assistant

Writing Activity 写作活动

- Write the new composition with these diagrams.

按下面的引导写作

First paragraph -guided

Second paragraph -guided

Third paragraph - free

An Honest Shop——assistant

(1),Zhang Hong was going .,she brief——case She found .

she manager.

(2)The manager took

diaryher.

(3)(past tense)

.

Model Passage 2

May 31stSunday Fine

It was Grandma’s birthday.Father, Mother and I went to visit her.She lives with my uncle in a village.It is about 20 kilometers away.

Early in the morning we bought a big piece of birthday cake and some fruit.Then we took the bus to get there.

Grandma and Uncle were so glad to see us.We gave the presents to Grandma and she was very happy.Then we sat down to talk, while Uncle went to prepare lunch.The meal was so nice that we all enjoyed it very much.At 4 o’clock, we said good——bye and set off for home.

Presentation 介绍

1.Read the above text carefully and remember it.

细读、记忆范文

2.Pay attention to the way of writing a diary:

注意日记的写作格式

1) date, day and weather2)tense: simple past tense

3.Questions on the model text.对范文的提问

e.g.1) Whose birthday was it?

2) What did you buy?

3) How did you get there?

4) What did you do at your grandma’s house?

5) When did you return?

4.Write a similar diary according to the following information.根据提示写类似的一篇日记

Time: September 13,2006 Sunday——Mid——Autumn Day

What to do: visited Grandpa and Grandma

Writing Activity 写作活动

First and second paragraphs:(Complete the sentences)(第一、二段完成句子)

Third paragraph: (Free)(第三段自由发挥)

A Diary

Today is the Chinese traditional festival——the .

Father, mother and I went to visit .

They with my in a flat .It

.

Early in the afternoon, mooncakes and .Then .

.

Model Passage 3

My Hobby

I have an interesting hobby.I collect stamps.I spend a lot of time on my stamp collection after school hours.I have collected hundreds of stamps now.Many of them are Chinese stamps.Quite a few are from other countries.But they are all in color.

I like stamps with pictures of animals and birds on them.In this way, I learn the names of many animals and birds.I also borrow books on animals and birds from the library.I learn many things about them.

Sometimes I have many stamps of the same kind.I give them to my friends.They then give me other stamps in return.I write to my friends in other countries.I send them stamps of my country.In return they send me stamps of their countries.

Presentation 介绍

1.Read the above comprehension passage carefully and remember it.熟读、记忆范文

2.Pictures of some kinds of coins to arouse interest on topic e.g.old coins and new ones, even some coins from other countries.观察硬币图片

3.Write a parallel text based on the above comprehension passage。根据范文创作新篇

4.Parallel text 习作对应题目

Ah Fang’s hobby or Ah Qiang’s hobby

5.The main points in the three paragraphs of the parallel text.三段的写作要点

Ah Fang’s Hobby

Para 1 Ah Fang’s hobby and her coins Para 2 How she learns more about coins──visiting experienced people,borrowing books from the city library Para 3 How she enlarges her collection ─——through exchange with friends.

6.Remember to use the Simple Present Tense,e.g.has, loves, learns, etc 用一般现在时写作

Writing activity 写作活动

I.Fill in the blanks in the first paragraph.第一段:填空

Ah Fang has an interesting .She collects

.She spends in her spare time.She has collected over two hundred.

Most of them, quite a few .They are all in various .

II.Complete these sentences.第二段:完成句子

Ah Fang loves .In this way,.She visits .She also borrowsfrom .She learns .

III.Finish the story in your own words.

用自己的话完成全文

Sometimes she

.

Model Passage 4

A Visit to the National Bird Park

Last Sunday Mr.Chen took Liying and Zhiming to the National Bird Park.It was their first visit to the bird park.Mr.Chen bought three tickets outside the park.

The first birds the children saw were the penguins.They were swimming in the pond.How funny they looked! Liying and Zhiming saw more birds as they walked.They saw parrots, pigeons, owls, hawks, and eagles.Liying liked the penguins most.Zhiming liked the hornbills because of their huge beaks.

The children walked among the birds at the Changhong Fall Aviary (大鸟笼).The birds were beautiful and the waterfall was high.Mr.Chen and the children enjoyed their first visit to the bird park.

Presentation介绍

1.Read the model text carefully and pay attention to the organization and tense (Past tense)used in the text.仔细阅读范文,注意文章的组织结构和时态(一般过去时)

2.Pay attention to the content of the 3 paragraphs.注意范文三段的内容

1st——the day and people who went to the park

2nd——what the children saw and what they liked

3rd——special features of the bird park and the feeling of the visitors.

3.Remember the text well ,better retell it.

记忆或复述范文

4.Write the names of the animals in the zoo.

写出动物园的一些动物名称

monkeysgiraffescamels zebras

elephants tigers lions

5.Parallel text 根据范文的组织结构仿写

题目:A visit to the zoo

Write the new text in three paragraphs, using the Past Tense 用过去时写三段

Writing activity 写作活动

Paragraph 1:Fill in the missing words.填写缺词完成第一段

Last Saturday Mrs Yang took to .It was to .

Mrs Yang bought.

Paragraph 2: Complete with the words given below.

用所给词完成第二段

children How likedwerelookedbecause

The first animals

.

Paragraph 3: Finish the third paragraph in your own words:

用自己的话完成第三段

.

Model Passage 5

My Pet——a white mouse

Some of us keep pets as a hobby.My pet is a white mouse and his name is Mickey.He has pink eyes and a long tail.His body is covered with soft white fur.

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